You had some really well thought out ideas for essay 1 ("just because things get easier, doesn't mean they get simpler"). All the core elements of the essay are there, but you need some more discussion on what techniques Eliot uses to push her point.
Essay 2 was much more focused on the prompt. You answered what was called for succinctly, and provided background information without summarizing the story. Well done! If I have one suggestion, it is to take out the "based on what I've read" qualification. Adding that doesn't lessen the impact if you are wrong, as it still places you at fault. If you're aiming to alleviate the pressure of tentatively stating what you think is a fact, qualify it more along the lines of "it is popularly believed". Basically, if you're going to write on the assumption of a fact, state the fact with confidence, even if you're not entirely certain. That's not to say you should lie, but if you're basing your whole essay on a fact, you should at least assume that it is entirely correct.
Anyway sorry for rambling, I'm not even sure if that's actually valid writing advice to give, it just came to mind. Good essays, regardless of my nitpicking.
You had some really well thought out ideas for essay 1 ("just because things get easier, doesn't mean they get simpler"). All the core elements of the essay are there, but you need some more discussion on what techniques Eliot uses to push her point.
ReplyDeleteEssay 2 was much more focused on the prompt. You answered what was called for succinctly, and provided background information without summarizing the story. Well done! If I have one suggestion, it is to take out the "based on what I've read" qualification. Adding that doesn't lessen the impact if you are wrong, as it still places you at fault. If you're aiming to alleviate the pressure of tentatively stating what you think is a fact, qualify it more along the lines of "it is popularly believed". Basically, if you're going to write on the assumption of a fact, state the fact with confidence, even if you're not entirely certain. That's not to say you should lie, but if you're basing your whole essay on a fact, you should at least assume that it is entirely correct.
Anyway sorry for rambling, I'm not even sure if that's actually valid writing advice to give, it just came to mind. Good essays, regardless of my nitpicking.
thanks for the advice, the rambling was helpful.
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